Talk:Moana: Directors Cut/@comment-39534673-20190910201107/@comment-39534673-20190910213139

I will give a "deep dive" on the points I made then:

1. The clichéd Trollpastas that usually make the reader laugh mostly satirize the cliché they used by modifying them to be funny. One of the examples I can give you is very pasta you mentioned, which has the Cliche Madness tag for a reason: it has lots of clichés. However, the author made sure to not leave the clichés untouched. Instead, he modified them to make fun of the cliché themselves. If you are going to use tons of cliches, make sure to sanitize them to entertain your audience.

2. The lack of paragraphs (except when the heading separates the text), the use of horizontal scrolling text and poor image placement (Moana's image is too big and is in a very tight spot thus the text is squished on that specific paragraph. Put smaller images on articles unless you separate them from the text itself).

3. The text is incoherent because stuff happens without rime or reason, making the reader struggle with questions about what they just read.

Ex: "Maui was coevered in blood, but when he turned into an eagle, he dropped the heart, causing Te Ka to start twisting him and breaking his neck, Maui was then covered in dust and never seen again."

Why was Maui covered in blood? Why and how Te Ka started twisting and breaking his neck after he dropped the real heart? Why was he covered in dust? Did Maui just disappear?

I couldn't picture what exactly happened in this story due the utter randomness of events. "Random lulz" pastas are usually difficult to understand and not funny because nothing makes sense. Try to make your pastas have a premise and a plot. Give the reader a reason to read your pasta by giving them something unique. Something they will only find on your story and that will make they say "That was good and worth the reading. I would read it again anytime."