Talk:Mario Kart 64: Driven/@comment-39534673-20191010134813

NARRATIVE DOESN'T WORK THAT WAY.

Foreshadowing doesn't make the story good. It makes it more predictable. This should be avoided at all costs but no. The author filled the story with that crap.

Excessive gore doesn't make it scary. It is just pointless shock value. Besides, the lack of passion shows by how everything (especially the shock material) is so poorly described.

The brother's overreaction doesn't contribute to anything. His existence is pointless.

The backstory is long, boring and pointless as all hell. Deleting it would make this crap more bearable.

This is an epic fail. Not as boring as Blood Whistle, but it is crap regardless. Unlike the aforementioned story, however, this one made me laugh a couple of times when the author contradicted himself on the same sentence.